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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak pther languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak pther languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts illustrate the number of
British
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students
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 at a particular university in England that could speak other
languages
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 apart from English between 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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,
while
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 the
percentage
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 of
students
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 who were able to speak only Spanish has risen, the
percentage
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 of
British
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students
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 who could not speak any other
languages
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 except English has fallen by half. In detail, in 2000, Spanish-speaking alone had the highest
percentage
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 in the chart, which accounted for 30%. Regarding
this
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,
however
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, in 2010 the
percentage
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 of
British
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students
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 who could speak only Spanish increased by 5%, going from 30% to 35%.
Next,
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the
percentage
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 of
British
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students
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 who were unable to speak any other
languages
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 except English accounted for 20% which stayed the second largest
percentage
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 in the 2000’s chart. But in 2010, the
percentage
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 went down by 10% as in 2010 it only accounted for 10% of
British
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students
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.
On the other hand
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, in 2000,
British
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students
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 who could speak only French and another unidentified language accounted for the same
percentage
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, which was 15%.
Similarly
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, the
percentage
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 of only German-speaking and two other unidentified
languages
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 accounted for only 10%, which
also
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 represented the lowest of other
languages
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 spoken by
British
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students
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 in 2000.
By contrast
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, there were some changes in the
percentage
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 of
students
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 who spoke only French, as the
percentage
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 fell down from 15% in 2000 to 10% in 2010. At the same time, the
percentage
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 of
students
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 who could speak two other unidentified
languages
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 and another unidentified language went up by 5%, going from 10% to 15% and from 15% to 20% respectively. Meanwhile, there was no change in the
percentage
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 of
students
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 who only spoke German, the
percentage
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 remained the same at 10% from 2000 to 2010.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words british, students, languages, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 14 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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