More and more city workers are deciding to live in the country and travel into work every day. The result is increased traffic congestion and damage to the environment. What measures do you think could be taken to encourage people not to travel such long distances into work?

Though metropolises used to be glittering ideal places to live, there has been a trend for employees to move to the outskirts recently and commute long
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to workplaces daily.
This
places a burden on traffic status and environmental safety;
therefore
, actions needed to be taken to tackle
this
issue, both temporarily and permanently. There are some instant solutions to refrain workers from participating
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lengthy
way
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to
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work.
First,
policies regard to mortgage laws should be established in
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way that
maintain
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lands and houses in big cities at
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price so that even practitioners with low income are able to afford to rent or possess. Not being over-charged monthly in terms of accommodation certainly attract more individuals to settle in cities.
Second,
enterprises had better involve technological devices to allow their staff to work from home if possible.
This
is a win-win strategy for all parts related because
while
job-takers relaxingly experience their home-working environment without sacrificing general productivity, roads
also
seem to be less severely condensed.
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, it’s necessary that authorities need to upgrade
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system
as well as
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the gap between cities and
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near-by
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regions. In order to meet the demands to transport of the unavoidable growing over-population, roads need to be widely broadened
along with
generous investment
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public
transports
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.
Additionally
, it’s essential that governments should locate more schools and factories in the suburbs to improve living standards there;
as a result
, there won’t be many significant differences between city centres and their surroundings. It’s imaginable that a typical nuclear family would have more quality time
while
spending less time in traffic jams awaiting. Naturally, the march for the outer part of megacities is unstoppable despite the long-term consequences it lays on
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life in the now and in the future.
Nevertheless
, if proper action plans are discussed in-depth to build a sustainable and enjoyable
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development, there will be no doubt that soon the dilemma will be satisfactorily dealt
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