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The line graph below shows the population size, birth and death rate of England and Wales from 1700 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the population size, birth and death rate of England and Wales from 1700 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 image illustrates the number of people living in England and Wales and the
birth
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 and
death
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 rate per 1000 persons between 1700 and 2000.
Overall
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, the
population
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 size increases over the years in the United Kingdom
while
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 the
birth
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 and
death
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rates
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 remain stable. The main trend on the graph shows the
population
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 growth in the UK of 50
million
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 between 1700 and 2000.
However
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, in 1750 there was an increase of 10
million
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 but dropped approximately to 5
million
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.
After
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this
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, the
population
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 sharply increased peaking at 50
million
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 in the year 2000.
On the other hand
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,
birth
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 and
death
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rates
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 fluctuate between 20/1000 and 40/1000 individuals. Both
rates
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 increased from 1700 to 1750 remaining stable until 1800 staying around 38-39 per 1000. From that point, both
rates
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 gradually decreased approximating 20/1000,
however
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, the
birth
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 rate increased in 2000
while
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 the
death
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 rate remained stable. In general, those two
rates
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 haven't changed dramatically compared to the
population
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 size.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words birth, death, population, rates, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 3 times.
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