The two pie charts below show the percentages of industry sectors’ contribution to the economy of Turkey in 2000 and 2016.

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contribution

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economy from 2000 to 2016. From

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perspective,its readily apparent that construction,manufacturing trade utilities and transportation

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period. Agriculture is the most dominating

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in 2000 , before a decline of 10 % in 2016.

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field contributing 17% of total income. Sectors like

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and hospitality and government related decreased

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period falling to 14 and 9% respectively.

Construction

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boosted dramatically from 3% in 2000 to 10 % in construction raising from

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. In 2000 manufacture accounted for 8 % , later rose to 8 % in 2016

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The two pie charts below show the percentages of industry sectors’ contribution to the economy of Turkey in 2000 and 2016.

Many developed countries are giving financial aid to poor countries. However, this hasn’t solved the problem of poverty in these nations and so other types of help are needed. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

Writing Task 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Nowadays, more people move away from their friends and families for work. Do advantages outweigh the disadvantages? You should write at least 250 words.

The best way to plan a holiday is by not planning at all. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task

Some people say that school education is not useful and the essence of study can be acquired at home. Do you agree? Why or why not? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.

Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?