The two pie charts below show the percentages of industry sectors’ contribution to the economy of Turkey in 2000 and 2016.

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contribution

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made by

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the turkey

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turkey

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economy from 2000 to 2016. From

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perspective,its readily apparent that construction,manufacturing trade utilities and transportation

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period. Agriculture is the most dominating

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in 2000 , before a decline of 10 % in 2016.

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and

eduvation

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education

field contributing 17% of total income. Sectors like

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leisure

and hospitality and government related decreased

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3 % in

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period falling to 14 and 9% respectively.

Construction

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boosted dramatically from 3% in 2000 to 10 % in construction raising from

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contributing

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. In 2000 manufacture accounted for 8 % , later rose to 8 % in 2016

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