The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years
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The two pie charts compare 5 categories of France's comparison of energy production (gas, petrol, nuclear,coal and others) between 1995 and 2005.
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It is the noticeable proportion of petrol experienced a considerable fall from 1995 to 2005 Linking Words
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In 1995, 29.27% of average France's assimilation of energy production belonged to petrol which has one of the largest pie charts. Linking Words
In contrast
, by 2005, Linking Words
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figure had fallen by a decade per cent.
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By contrast
, in terms of coal, the proportion of comparing Linking Words
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category made up 29.80% in 1995, after decade Linking Words
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figure saw an increase in per cent retail sector of all.
In France, the smallest production of energy belonged to others in the first year, Linking Words
however
, in 2005, there was one on twenty per cent rise from 4.90% to 9.10 %Linking Words
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