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The line chart shows trends in terms of employment in the USA in millions and predictions for the future

The line chart shows trends in terms of employment in the USA in millions and predictions for the future
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The chart provides information regarding the number of employees, split by three different industries (Manufacturing, Services, Agriculture), in the USA over a fifty-year
period
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, from 1975 to 2025. Units are measured in millions of people.
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, each industry has a different trend over the
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 given, which mentioned industries are predicted to stand at a low number in 2025, except Services. To start with, Agriculture stood at exactly 80
million
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 individuals in the first
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, which remained stable for the next 2 years, before decreasing dramatically and
projected
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 to get the lowest point at only 10
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 in the
last
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 year. Regarding the Manufacturing industry, it started with just around 10
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 , which
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 went up gradually and reached its peak at 40
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 in 1980, after which it
expected
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 to slip back to its original level
at
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of
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 10
million
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at the end
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 of the
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. Turning to or In comparison, the Services industry,
it
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began with just 10
million
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 employees in the first
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, which
then
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 slightly increased to around 15
million
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 in the next four years, before forecasted to have a significant rise and achieve the apex, at 90
millions
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million
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 in the
last
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 year.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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