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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where
The data expresses the
export
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value
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 in a country for different categories in 2015 and 2016.
Overall
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,
export
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earnings
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 increased from 2015 to 2016 in the following categories: petroleum
products
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, engineered goods, Agriculture
products
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 and textiles.
On the other hand
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, it decreased in the gems and jewellery categories. The charts illustrate that, In 2015, the
export
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earnings
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 in petroleum
products
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 were $60
billion
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,
then
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 it increased by 3% in 2016.
While
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 the engineered goods have increased by 8.5% in 2016, its
earnings
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 were nearly $58
billion
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.
On the other hand
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, the
export
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 revenues for jewellery and gems have decreased by 5.18%, Noting that the revenues were almost $51
billion
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 in 2015. For Agricultural
products
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, the
value
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 of
export
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 earned in 2015 was $40
billion
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,
whereas
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,
this
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value
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 slightly increased by 0.81% in 2016.
However
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, the textile
earnings
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 were the lowest in 2015 at $38
billion
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 only. It showed significant growth in the
value
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 of
earnings
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 by 15.24%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words export, value, earnings, products, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • export value
  • economic sector
  • percentage change
  • increment
  • decrement
  • fluctuation
  • trend analysis
  • year-on-year comparison
  • significant growth/decline
  • stagnation
  • market dynamics
  • fiscal repercussions
  • trade balance
  • competitive advantage
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