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Writing task 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Some employers believe that job applicants’ social skills are more important than their academic qualifications. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Nowaday
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, more and more clients argue employers prefer employing
people
 who have
high
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a high
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level
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levels
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 of social
skills
instead
 their academic qualifications.
While
 other
group
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 of
community
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the community
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 claim that it is better to hire workers who have great academic
quanlifications
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qualifications
. I completely agree that
company's
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companies
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 tend to hire
people
have
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who have
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 more social
skills
. First of all,
it is clear that
 community
skills
important
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 in the past to now, humans improve their technology by
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 with each
others
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, there
aslo
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also
 make
them
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their
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life
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mroe
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more
 better. Take some examples, a lot of famous achievements can not
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 by one person only,
such
 as
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 of
Liberity
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Liberty
.
Therefore
, it is well for a
company
 that
employing
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employs
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public
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the public
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 who have good community abilities, they have able to collaborate with other
worker
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workers
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 and make a number of plans
of
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company
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the company
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 more effectively.
On the other hand
, even that pollution
who
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have
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has
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 a wide range of knowledge and
a
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plenty of
quantilications
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quantifications
qualifications
quantification
, it is still difficult to take action alone without
help
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 of another one, and obviously that
people
's energy is limited.
Moreover
, it is hard to ensure that higher academic
quanlifications
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qualifications
equal
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with
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good
practical
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 and leadership abilities,
people
 who have less aware of
cooperate
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cooperation
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 still hard finish the project
by
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company
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the company
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 given because of their lower socials
skills
 even
thoung
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though
 they are smart and study more theories. In conclusion, I believe that unbelievable power
gathered
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 from every
individuals
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 energy,
hence
 think like a
company
 owner, it will
brings
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 more benefits if you employ
public
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the public
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 who have high-level social
skills
 and leadership abilities.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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