Some employers believe that job applicants’ social skills are more important than their academic qualifications. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowaday
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Nowadays

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, more and more clients argue employers prefer employing
people
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who have
high
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a high

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level
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levels

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of social
skills
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instead
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their academic qualifications.
While
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other
group
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of
community
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the community

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claim that it is better to hire workers who have great academic
quanlifications
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qualifications

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. I completely agree that
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company's
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companies
company

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tend to hire
people
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have
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more social
skills
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. First of all,
it is clear that
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community
skills
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important
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were important

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in the past to now, humans improve their technology by
cooperate
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cooperating

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with each
others
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other

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, there
aslo
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also

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make
them
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their

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life
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live

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mroe
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more

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better. Take some examples, a lot of famous achievements can not
completed
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complete
be completed

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by one person only,
such
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as
Effiel
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the Effiel

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Tower or
Statue
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the Statue

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of
Liberity
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Liberty

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.
Therefore
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, it is well for a
company
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that
employing
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employs

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public
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the public

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who have good community abilities, they have able to collaborate with other
worker
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workers

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and make a number of plans
of
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for

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company
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the company
a company

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more effectively.
On the other hand
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, even that pollution
who
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which

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have
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has

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a wide range of knowledge and
a
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apply

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plenty of
quantilications
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quantifications
qualifications
quantification

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, it is still difficult to take action alone without
help
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the help

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of another one, and obviously that
people
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's energy is limited.
Moreover
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, it is hard to ensure that higher academic
quanlifications
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qualifications

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equal
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with
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apply

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good
practical
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practice

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and leadership abilities,
people
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who have less aware of
cooperate
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cooperation

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still hard finish the project
by
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apply

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company
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the company

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given because of their lower socials
skills
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even
thoung
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though

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they are smart and study more theories. In conclusion, I believe that unbelievable power
gathered
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is gathered

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from every
individuals
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individual's

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energy,
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think like a
company
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owner, it will
brings
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bring

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more benefits if you employ
public
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the public

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who have high-level social
skills
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and leadership abilities.
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