Some people feel that certain workers like nurses, doctors and teachers are undervalued and should be paid more, especially when other people like film actors or company bosses are paid huge sums of money that are out of proportion to the importance of the work that they do.-How far do you agree? -What criteria should be used to decide how much people are paid?
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Nowadays, some professional roles that
required
certain skill are valued less than other who does not. In my opinion, a job that needs high skill should be paid more. Wrong verb form
require
However
, the number of responsibilities someone takes should be the most important consideration Linking Words
to determine
their salary.
On the bright side, even though these professional jobs do not earn a lot of money, they will get a steady income. Change preposition
in determining
Conversely
, the CEO or actor's income is based on the company or movie production's profit. No one can guarantee they will be well-paid. Linking Words
For example
, a start-up boss should put investments in their product without knowing if they are going to be successful or not. Whenever the corporation gets sums of money, the allowance will be put on the company's Linking Words
saving
first. If the corporate fail, they will not be getting any money, or worse, go bankrupt. Replace the word
savings
Otherwise
, if they get a lot of profit, they will be the ones who Linking Words
is being
wealthy.
Nurses, doctors, teachers, and even engineers are indeed utterly important to exist in society. Wrong verb form
are
For instance
, if someone suffering from an illness, they need to go to a doctor to cure their disease. Linking Words
Otherwise
, the patient could die. Linking Words
Nevertheless
, Linking Words
this
job needs to take a Linking Words
long-time
to learn at school to master the requirements they need to pass before they are qualified enough to work. Correct your spelling
long time
Therefore
, the impact should be a consideration Linking Words
to determine
someone's salary. If not, these roles will vanish.
In conclusion, someone’s income should be considered by their impact on the company and society, particularly for a job which is only mastered by particular people. Change preposition
in determining
Moreover
, the impact could be on other people or the company’s profit.Linking Words
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