The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The figures illustrate the process of
cement
-making step by step, and for producing concrete which is used for building constructions, how much
cement
is used in concrete.
Overall
, for producing
cement
there are two main
materials
which are needed,
also
it takes five different stages with three different
equipment
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. Concrete
that is
used for
building
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the building
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have
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four
materials
which gravel has the highest ratio, and water has the least. In
cement
production
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there are two main
materials
: limestone and clay.
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the first stage
with
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crusher limestone and clay
being
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powder,
then
they are mixed very well by a mixer. After
that
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it is thrown in the rotating heater
,
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and gets heated. And in the final stage grinder is used to prepare
final
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production
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which is the
cement
and go for packing. for producing concrete there is only one equipment and four
materials
. Gravel which are small stones
have
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has
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the most ratio in concrete with 50%. Sand has the one-fourth ratio, and
cement
and water have 15% and 10% respectively. All the
materials
are filled in the concrete mixer to mix well to produce concrete.
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