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The graph below shows the percentage of households, grouped by poverty, on the basis of access to refrigerator, electricity and water in Ghana for the year 1991/1992 to 1998/1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The column graph
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illustrates
 the difference between 3 class categories from Ghana and the percentage of
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access
 each of them had
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 3 different electric appliances over the
years
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,
it is clear that
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non poor
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 habitants have a higher percentage of accessibility than the poor and very poor ones. It can be seen, that there is an increasing trend between the
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 91/92 and 98/99 of access
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 all the basic amenities for richer people compared to the less rich ones.
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, the
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access
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 the refrigerator was approximately 20% more
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accessible
 for the noon poor compared to the other two.
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, it can be observed that over the
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 the access increases for reach people but decreases for the group of people with less money.
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 the electricity service where rich
household
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 had 73% of access during the
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 91 and 92,
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, the poor ones were at 57% in 91 and 92 and decreased a 10% in 98 and 99.

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