The chart below shows the proportions of graduates from Brighton University in 2019 entering different employment sectors. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie chart above depicts the percentage of students in 2019 from Brighton University working in various sectors. From the data provided, it is evident that one-third of the graduates

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chosen the service industry as the most popular sector to develop their career. The second largest option was manufacturing industries as sectors for their livelihood with a portion of 16,3%, followed by education at 14,7% and politics and government accounted for 12,1%. Meanwhile, transportation and warehousing and science and technology have contributed to 7,8% and 7,3% respectively for the graduation to sustain their life with the academic insight they got at the university.

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, civil service becomes their option to support their daily need but with a percentage only at 5,6%. The statistic

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graduation to dedicate their knowledge and skills to society for 2.8%.

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become the least popular choices for

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to earn money with a proportion of only 0,4% combined.

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The chart below shows the proportions of graduates from Brighton University in 2019 entering different employment sectors. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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