The chart below shows the proportion of staff employed by age in the public sector in the UK in 2015 and 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the proportion of staff employed by age in the public sector in the UK in 2015 and 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph provided displays the percentage of employees employed in the public sector in the UK by age in 2015 and 2020. Unsurprisingly, there were some changes
occurred
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in 5 years, as the number of young workers rose a bit. In 2015,
labor
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aged over 50 and 21 to 30,
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for 23% for each,
were
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the highest among all groups. They
then
followed by employees aged 31 to 40, 41-50, and under 21,
contributed
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to 21%, 19%, and 14% of total human resources, respectively. 5 years later, the proportion of staff aged 21 to 30 increased by 10% to maintain the crown as the biggest contributor of total workers in the sector.
On the other hand
, staff aged over 50, which accounted for the highest percentage 5 years earlier,
along with
the latest biggest group, went the other way to decline by 7%. Staff aged 41 to 50 experienced a quite significant improvement, from 19% to 28%. The other two groups, under 21 and 31 to 40, both declined to 12% and 11% respectively.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • public sector
  • employment trends
  • age demographics
  • experienced professionals
  • demand for stability
  • employment proportion
  • retirement trends
  • policy changes
  • value experience
  • age brackets
  • consistent demand
  • notable decrease/increase
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