The chart above shows the percentage of people consuming five servings of fruit and vegetables divided by three categories of men, women and children in the UK between 2001 and 2008.

The chart above shows the percentage of people consuming five servings of fruit and vegetables divided by three categories of men, women and children in the UK between 2001 and 2008.
The chart above shows the percentage of people consuming five servings of fruit and vegetables divided by three categories of
men
, women and
children
in the UK between 2001 and 2008.
Overall
, it is clear from the chart that women have the upper hand over the other two in the case of consumption during the period. In the 2001 chart, the percentage of
children
and
men
who ate the full five servings was only about 13% in
children
and 17% in the herd and remained unchanged for the following 2 years. From 2004 to 2006 there was a gradual growth of about 18%
children
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to about 22% in 2006 and about 23% for
men
to about 27% in 2006.
Children
continued to increase the following year, and
men
remained the same.By 2008, both had decreased with
children
about
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at about
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24% and
men
about
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at about
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26%. Among women, eating five portions of fruit and vegetables per day was the highest of the other two, around 21% in 2001 and
continuing
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continued
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to grow rapidly in the following years with a peak in 2006
35
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% and
decrease
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a decrease
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in the following years with 2007 being about 33% and
finally
2008 with 30%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Consumption
  • Servings
  • Nutritional habits
  • Steady increase/decrease
  • Fluctuations
  • Dietary choices
  • Health consciousness
  • Public health campaigns
  • Demographic differences
  • Statistical comparison
  • Healthy lifestyle
  • Year-on-year analysis
  • Gender disparity
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