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The line graph illustates young adult unemployment rates in England and how these rates changed from 1993 and 2012.

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The line graph shows young adult
unemployment
 rates in
England
1993
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 and 2012.Units are measured in percentage.
It is clear that
, aged 16-24
London
 was by far the most important
forms
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form
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 of
unemployment
 ages over the period shown
while
 the lowest amount of
unemployment
 age was provided by
overall
 rest of
England
. In 1993 aged 16-24
London
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in London
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 was the main form of unemployed in
England
 making up 25% . In that period about 22% youngest
was
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were
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unemployment
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unemployed
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,
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however
, the least kinds of
ubmeployment
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unemployment
employment
 aged
overall
London
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in London
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 about 9% . Between 2002 and 2003
unemployment
 aged 16-24
London
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in London
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 and aged 16-24 rest of
England
 rose dramatically to
peak
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the peak
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 of about 24 and 22%
unemployment
 aged within
5 year
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5-year
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unemployment
overall
London
 declined to a low of about 9% .
Enemployment
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Unemployment
 aged 16-24 overtook aged 16-24 rest of
England
 as the main
forms
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form
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 of
enemliyment
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unemployment
.
By contrast
,
at the end
 of
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the period
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period
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,period
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 unemployed aged
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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overall
 decreased to a low of about9%.
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