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In schools and universities girls tend to choose arts subject while other boys choose science subjects. what is reason should be trained to be changed.

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When learning at school and college, female
students
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 tend to consider arts as their preference,
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 the priority of the majority of males is scientific
subjects
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. The reasons
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 whether
students
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 should be educated to change their
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 preferences will be discussed.
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 with, the
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choices
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 of
students
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 are principally influenced by two factors,
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brain
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 tendency and
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social
stereotypes
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. Many scientific studies, especially neurological research, indicate that in puberty,
boys
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 are left-brained and
girls
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 are right-brained. It is widely known that the
brain
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 has two parts: the left and the right. The left half is mainly responsible for calculating and logical activities,
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 it can develop its advantage in
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 which require calculation and critical thinking
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 as mathematics, physics, chemistry, biology and philosophy. Meanwhile, the right half is usually related to imagination and creativity, so it is suitable for artistic activities like painting, singing, dancing and playing instruments.
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 the two
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 halves have interactions, in general, they function as described. Because of the
brain
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 tendency,
boys
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 are more likely to learn scientific
subjects
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 at school and university,
while
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girls
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 tend to
persuit
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pursue
 arts. Another important factor
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 their
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 is the
stereotypes
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 in society. People usually believe that
boys
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 cannot learn arts since their
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minds
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 are too
regid
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rigid
 to understand the aesthetics of
art works
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artworks
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, and
girls
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 cannot
persuit
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pursue
 science as they do not have enough intelligence to comprehend complicated ideas.
As a result
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, parents are more likely to let their sons learn mathematics, physics, chemistry or biology, and their daughters dance, sing or paint. In spite of
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, it is not practical to educate
students
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 to change their mindset in terms of choosing
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. As said, the
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 preference does not only come from the thoughts of
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' parents but
also
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 from the natural features of
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brain
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.
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, it can make no sense to train compulsorily a male student to learn singing or dancing and a female to calculate and analyse.
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,
students
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 have the freedom to decide which
subjects
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 they will learn. A number of
boys
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 can prefer painting or dancing to calculating and plenty of
girls
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 tend to study scientific topics.
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, changing their thoughts can infringe
their
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 freedom, and it is better to let everything occur naturally. In conclusion, the features of
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brain
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 and social
stereotypes
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 are the main reasons for the
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choices
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 of
students
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, and they should not be trained to change their
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minds
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 as these
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 have
natural
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 basis and changing
students
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' thoughts can infringe their freedom.

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