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Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths and weaknesses. Is it right to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender?

#women #men #strengths #weaknesses #right #males #females #professions #gender
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women
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 and
men
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 have different
strengths
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 and weaknesses, I do not believe anyone should be excluded from any profession because of their
gender
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 as
this
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 can greatly hinder
people
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 whose
strengths
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 do not conform to that of most
people
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 in their respective
gender
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 categories.
Firstly
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, I want to state that I believe
men
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 and
women
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 have different
strengths
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 and weaknesses,
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, many studies have shown that
women
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 tend to have
strengths
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 in
roles
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 that are caring and nurturing in nature, which enables them to excel in job
roles
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 like teaching, nursing, and midwifery.
In contrast
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, the study
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 discovered that
men
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 tend to do very well in
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 that are technical like engineering, and Technology.
this
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,
however
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, does not mean that there are not
women
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 who excel in technical
roles
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, and
men
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 who prefer more nurturing occupations. The study only shows what the majority of the
people
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 in the two different
gender
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 categories prefer. The danger of excluding
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 from participating in any profession
due to
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 their
gender
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 is that it excludes
people
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 whose interests and
strengths
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 do not conform to the majority of the
people
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 in their
gender
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 category. These
people
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 are what the study describes as outliers
for example
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 a woman who performs extraordinarily in more masculine job
roles
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 like engineering and technology and a man who has feminine traits and excels in more traditionally known female
roles
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. In conclusion, no one should be excluded from any profession because of their
gender
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 even though each
gender
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 has its own strength and weaknesses. We have to be careful not to exclude
people
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 whose
strengths
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 and abilities do not conform with the majority.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender stereotypes
  • societal views
  • inherent biases
  • professional capabilities
  • gender inclusivity
  • equal opportunities
  • diversity
  • unique perspectives
  • physical attributes
  • psychological attributes
  • workplace adaptations
  • modern advancements
  • legal frameworks
  • gender discrimination
  • ethical implications
  • career opportunities
  • case studies
  • real-world examples
  • traditionally dominated
  • successful outcomes
  • atypical roles
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