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The two pie charts compare five categories household expenditure( food, housing, education other products and services, healthcare) between 2019 and 2020. Units are measured in percentage.

The two pie charts compare five categories household expenditure( food, housing, education other products and services, healthcare) between 2019 and 2020. Units are measured in percentage.
The graph shows
average
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the average
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 household expenditure in 2019 and 2020. The
giving
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pie
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 charts illustrate
average
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the average
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 household expenditure from 2019 to 2020. It can
be think
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 that two graphs, a
lot
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 of changes. In 2019, a
lot
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 of people utilize food in 55 and housing 20%.
other look
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another look
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, healthcare 5 proportion. Other
products
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 and services from healthcare and a
lot
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 of people apply to 7% education other look
products
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 very much 13%. In 2020,
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Pie
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the Pie
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 charts a
lot
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 of changes.
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, food
decline
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41
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by 41
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% and housing
decrease
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decreased
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19
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by 19
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%. And other
products
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, healthcare other
products
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 and services grow
up
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by
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 18% from 2019 to 2020 and education declined
2
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by 2
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%
the
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in the
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pie
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 chart.
Overall
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 the given
pie
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 chart the people a
lot
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 of utilize food and housing Look
other
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at other
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products
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This
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 is maximum used
to
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by
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population
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the population
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words pie, lot, products with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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