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The charts below show the percentage of food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants.

The charts below show the percentage of food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants.
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The pie chart illustrates the proportion of average family expenditure on
food
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 over a 30-year period,
while
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 the line graph compares the number of
meals
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 served in fast
food
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restaurants
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 and sit-down
restaurants
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 annually from 1970 to 2000.
Overall
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, there was an increased tendency for families to dine at
restaurants
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, and home-cooked
meals
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 were no longer dominant in family
meals
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.
Moreover
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, it is apparent that fast
food
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meals
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 were preferred
at the end
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 of the period. To be more specific, home cooking was still the most popular way in 1970, as an average family spent 90% of their total
food
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 budget on home-cooked
food
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while
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 only one-tenth of the money was spent on
restaurants
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.
However
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, the ratio of home-cooked
meals
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 dropped continuously,
whereas
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 the opposite happened to eat out at
restaurants
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 throughout the years. In 2000, there was no difference between the two of them, both comprised half of the total
food
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 spending of a family. Moving to the line graph, the number of
meals
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 served in both fast
food
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 and sitdown
restaurants
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 started at 20 in 1970 and increased to 28 and 32 respectively.
Although
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 both showed a steady rise over time, the number of fast
food
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meals
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 demonstrated a dramatic escalation, more than tripling to around 85%, doubling that of sit-down
restaurants
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 in the final year.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, meals, restaurants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage of food budget
  • Fast food restaurants
  • Sit-down restaurants
  • Trends
  • Increase/decrease
  • Rise in popularity
  • Gradual rise
  • Cultural factors
  • Economic growth
  • Busy lifestyles
  • Changing societal norms
  • Proliferation
  • Casual dining experiences
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