IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

The tables given illustrate how the world population was contributed in different 6 regions in 1950 and 2000. Also, they reveal an estimation of the population in 2050. (in billions) Overall, the people of the world was increased and it is expected to rise in the future as wll. Moreover, Asia is the only region with the highest population rate, compared to others. In contrast, Oceania has the least position of this table. To begin, Asia experienced 4% increase and it is estimated to fall from 59% to 60%. In addition, Africa and Latin America are the two regions that witnessed an increase in their population and they are expected to increase in 2050 to just over 20% and 9%, respectively. People of the Europe and North America experienced a considerable fall which seem set to continue in the future. Oceania with just 1% of the people in the world, is the last region of population in this list.

The tables given illustrate how the world population was contributed in different 6 regions in 1950 and 2000. Also, they reveal an estimation of the population in 2050. (in billions) Overall, the people of the world was increased and it is expected to rise in the future as wll. Moreover, Asia is the only region with the highest population rate, compared to others. In contrast, Oceania has the least position of this table. To begin, Asia experienced 4% increase and it is estimated to fall from 59% to 60%. In addition, Africa and Latin America are the two regions that witnessed an increase in their population and they are expected to increase in 2050 to just over 20% and 9%, respectively. People of the Europe and North America experienced a considerable fall which seem set to continue in the future. Oceania with just 1% of the people in the world, is the last region of population in this list.
The tables below given illustrate how the world
population
Use synonyms
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
contributed in
different
Correct article usage
the different
show examples
 6 regions in 1950 and 2000.
Also
Linking Words
, they reveal an estimation of the
population
Use synonyms
 in 2050. (in billions)
Overall
Linking Words
, the number of people in the world was increased and it is expected to rise in the future as well.
Moreover
Linking Words
, Asia is the only region with the highest
population
Use synonyms
 rate, compared to others.
In contrast
Linking Words
, Oceania has the least position
of
Change preposition
in
show examples
this
Linking Words
 table.
To begin
Linking Words
, Asia experienced a 4% increase and it is estimated to fall from 59% to 60%.
In addition
Linking Words
, Africa and Latin America are the two regions that witnessed an increase in their
population
Use synonyms
 and they are expected to increase in 2050 to just over 20% and 9%, respectively. People of Europe and North America experienced a considerable fall which seems set to continue in the future. Oceania with just 1% of the people in the world, is the
last
Linking Words
 region of the
population
Use synonyms
 in
this
Linking Words
 list.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: