THe bar chart below shows the top ten contries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the infromation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

THe bar chart below shows the top ten contries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarise the infromation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The picture given presents the data of the top ten countries
who
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manufactured and consumed
electricity
in 2014, measured by
billion
kWh
.
Overall
, China and the United States are the two countries who
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the biggest
production
and
consumption
of
electricity
. Generally, all of the states have larger
electricity
production
than
consumption
, except for Germany. China led the
production
and
consumption
of
electricity
at 5,398 and 5,322
billion
kWh
respectively. In the next place, the United States manufactured 4,099 and used 3,866
billion
kWh
, making it the second largest country in terms of
electricity
production
and
consumption
.
However
, excluding Russia, the rest of the countries'
production
and
consumption
never exceeded 1,000
billion
kWh
.
Furthermore
, the Republic of Korea is the one and only nation with output and
consumption
below 500
billion
kWh
,
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which acts as the smallest electric-producing and
consumpting
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consumption
country. The output of
electricity
between Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil, and Germany varies between 526 and 936
billion
kWh
, with
electricity
usage between 455 and 856
billion
kWh
. Even so, Germany is the only one
who
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that
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has
bigger
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a bigger
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number in
consumption
than its output.
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