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THe bar chart below shows the top ten contries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the infromation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

THe bar chart below shows the top ten contries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the infromation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The picture given presents the data of the top ten countries
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 manufactured and consumed
electricity
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 in 2014, measured by
billion
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kWh
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.
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, China and the United States are the two countries who
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 the biggest
production
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 and
consumption
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 of
electricity
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. Generally, all of the states have larger
electricity
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production
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 than
consumption
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, except for Germany. China led the
production
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 and
consumption
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 of
electricity
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 at 5,398 and 5,322
billion
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kWh
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 respectively. In the next place, the United States manufactured 4,099 and used 3,866
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kWh
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, making it the second largest country in terms of
electricity
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production
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 and
consumption
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.
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, excluding Russia, the rest of the countries'
production
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 and
consumption
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 never exceeded 1,000
billion
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kWh
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.
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, the Republic of Korea is the one and only nation with output and
consumption
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 below 500
billion
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kWh
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,
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which acts as the smallest electric-producing and
consumpting
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consumption
 country. The output of
electricity
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 between Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil, and Germany varies between 526 and 936
billion
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kWh
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, with
electricity
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 usage between 455 and 856
billion
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kWh
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. Even so, Germany is the only one
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 has
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a bigger
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 number in
consumption
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 than its output.
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