The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.
These figures illustrate the levels and the
materials
used in the cement
-making process and how the concrete is created by some materials
such
as cement
, water, sand and gravel for construction aims.
Overall
, in regard to cement
production, this
process consists of five stages beginning with primary materials
and ending with packaging. Also
, concrete production is created with four stuffs
and a concrete mixer.
Change the wording
kinds of stuff
pieces of stuff
According to
the first figure, Limestone and clay are crushed and converted to powder by a crusher, and then
the powder is transmitted to the mixer. Next stage, these products are heated by the rotating heater. In the four place
, it is converted to small pieces by the grinder. Add a hyphen
four-place
Finally
, the cement
are
packed for shipping to the store.
Change the verb form
is
It is clear that
,
concrete is produced by mixing Remove the comma
apply
Cement
(15%), water(10%) and sand (25%). Besides
, half of materials
of concrete is gravel which is added to other Add an article
the materials
materials
during the turn of a mixer.Submitted by amirhsina on
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