The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart depicts Australia’s different levels of post-school qualifications for men and women respectively.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that in most of the degrees,
such
as the master's
degree
, the postgraduate
degree
, and the skilled vocational
diploma
, men accounted for a larger percentage of diplomas. In more detail, the gap between
females
and
males
obviously occurred in the skilled vocational
diploma
that there was approximately 90
percent
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per cent
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of the
males
owned a
degree
;
whereas
only 10
percent
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per cent
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of
females
gained it.
Besides
, the postgraduate
diploma
had a similar situation to the master's
degree
, both of which displayed that more
males
gained the
degree
than
females
who got it. These two categories existed a gap
with
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of
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forty
percent
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per cent
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and twenty
percent
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per cent
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respectively.
In contrast
, not only the undergraduate
diploma
but
also
the bachelor’s presented the trend that the number of
females
who gained the
diploma
exceeded the number of
males
.
Moreover
, it was clear that the
females
gaining
this
degree
is the largest category among the other four degrees.
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