The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The bar graph presents how 5 different
age
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groups
in the UK expended their money across three categories, named Use synonyms
food
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drink
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restaurant
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hotel
, and Use synonyms
entertainment
in 2004. Use synonyms
Overall
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food
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drink
expenditure raises with the Use synonyms
age
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groups
, how much the population spent in Use synonyms
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restaurant
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restaurants
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hotel
, and Fix the agreement mistake
hotels
entertainment
fluctuated between them.
People under Use synonyms
30-year-old
spent a little under 15% of their income in Correct your spelling
30 years old
restaurant
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hotel
and it is the Use synonyms
age
group which spend more in Use synonyms
this
category. Linking Words
While
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food
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drink
, and Use synonyms
entertainment
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represents
no much more than 5% of the total spending. For the next two Change the verb form
represent
age
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groups
, 31-45 and 46-60, Use synonyms
food
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drink
experienced a considerable increase and constituted the biggest share of expenditure for both Use synonyms
age
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groups
, overcoming the other two categories. Use synonyms
Whereas
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restaurant
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hotel
percentage slightly felt ending at the least way how people between 46 and 60 years-old waste their money, around 10%.
The next Use synonyms
age
group showed a contrast in their expenditure, Use synonyms
while
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food
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drink
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entertainment
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experience
an increase Wrong verb form
experienced
around
5% and 10% respectively, Change preposition
of around
entertainment
significantly decrease and it did account for 3% of the total spending. For people over 76, Use synonyms
entertainment
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havelt
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have
food
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drink
slight growth, and Use synonyms
entertainment
was the category which experience a significant increase.Use synonyms
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, groups, food, drink, restaurant, hotel, entertainment with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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