The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The bar graph presents how 5 different
age
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groups
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in the UK expended their money across three categories, named
food
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and
drink
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,
restaurant
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and
hotel
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, and
entertainment
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in 2004.
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,
food
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drink
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expenditure raises with the
age
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groups
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, how much the population spent in
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restaurant
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restaurants
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and
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hotel
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hotels
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, and
entertainment
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fluctuated between them. People under
30-year-old
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30 years old
spent a little under 15% of their income in
restaurant
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and
hotel
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and it is the
age
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group which spend more in
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category.
While
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food
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and
drink
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, and
entertainment
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represents
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no much more than 5% of the total spending. For the next two
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groups
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, 31-45 and 46-60,
food
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and
drink
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experienced a considerable increase and constituted the biggest share of expenditure for both
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groups
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, overcoming the other two categories.
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restaurant
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and
hotel
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percentage slightly felt ending at the least way how people between 46 and 60 years-old waste their money, around 10%. The next
age
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group showed a contrast in their expenditure,
while
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food
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and
drink
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and
entertainment
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experience
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experienced
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an increase
around
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of around
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5% and 10% respectively,
entertainment
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significantly decrease and it did account for 3% of the total spending. For people over 76,
entertainment
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havelt
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have
,
food
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and
drink
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slight growth, and
entertainment
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was the category which experience a significant increase.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, groups, food, drink, restaurant, hotel, entertainment with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • categories
  • age groups
  • residents
  • overview
  • breakdown
  • spending habits
  • comparison
  • trends
  • peaks
  • troughs
  • highest
  • lowest
  • significant
  • notable
  • priorities
  • shifts
  • lifestyle needs
  • financial constraints
  • patterns
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