The chart below shows the proportion of male and female students studying six art-related subjects at a UK university in 2011 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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men

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and

women

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preferences in art disciplines at British

university

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in 2011.

Overall

, the biggest percentage of

students

chose English language and literature as a core discipline t at university.

On the contrary

, Philosophy was the least popular subject among male

students

. During the given period, Linguistics and Communication and Media studies were among the popular disciplines with female learners - approximately 240 and 320

students

attended them respectively. In the same year, Philosophy and Art and Design were the least studied subjects among women with 150 and slightly over 115 attendants

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. In 2011, Communication and Media studies made a significant contribution

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learning art-related subjects among male

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- just over 200 undergraduate chose

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these disciplines. Linguistics

also

gained popularity as approximately 180 men chose it to study. In comparison, Philosophy was the least preferable subject to study - as 50 male

students

decided to choose it. It can be

also

noted that

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and Archeology discipline made the least contribution

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studies-only 115 women chose to study

this

subject and 90 men.

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