The charts below show the percentage of people aged 23-65 in different occupations in one UK town (Ashby) and in the UK as a whole in 2008

The charts below show the percentage of people aged 23-65 in different occupations in one UK town (Ashby) and in the UK as a whole in 2008
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The following pie charts demonstrate the dissimilarity in the proportion of citizens aged 23-65 in different professions in one UK
town
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(
Ashby
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) and in the whole UK in 2008. As can be easily observed, the unemployment rates in
Ashby
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were generally higher than the nationwide average rates.
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,
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personal service was the most preferable area of work in only the surveyed
town
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, office work was equally common for British people as a whole. Regarding the major components, personal service ranked first and constituted 21% of the workforce in
Ashby
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, as opposed to the nation's average of 17%.
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the largest proportion of the average UK working population labour in offices at 17%, it was marginally 8% lower at 9% in the
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. In terms of the remaining sectors,
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technical and professional personnel made up 17% and 14% of the national workforce, respectively,
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figure only stood at only 9% and 8% respectively in the examined area. Considerably, with 16%, construction activity represented a larger slice of
Ashby
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's occupations. A minor disparity of 4% was witnessed in the percentages of people who work in shops in the
town
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compared to nationwide average rates, at 21% and 17% respectively.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Occupation
  • Distribution
  • Economy
  • Local vs National
  • Major employer
  • Educational institution
  • Balanced distribution
  • Skewed
  • Trends
  • Implications
  • Economic development
  • Social services
  • Educational planning
  • Employment landscape
  • Geographic location
  • Urban dynamics
  • Rural dynamics
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