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Women and men are commonly seen as having different strength and weaknesses. Is it right to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In some
society
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, there is
gender
 inequality between
female
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females
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 and
male
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males
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 which is independent
on
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 their ability that includes body and
mentally
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 aspects. In
this
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i
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 will discuss why some public
choose
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 employees based on
gender
 and doesn’t allow them to be in
specific
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 career. On the one hand, some
people
 believe that men and women were created differently so they are distinguished in appearance,
characteristic
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characteristics
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,
behavioral
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 and personality.
Furthermore
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profession
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 are sorted by type of task. Some of them need to be
strength
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 and some
other
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others
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 need to have innovative and management thoughts. Everyone knows that generally men have physical power and other side women are very creative in partial issues, so they can be successful managers.
On the other hand
, in the
world
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 there are many
people
 who are against
gender
 inequality. They believe that for each situation, society should hold a competition between all
gender
 to
proved
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 their capabilities.
For
example
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 some of the best chefs are men in the world and sometimes women are able to do their tasks as
a
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 best judge or engineer. Even
so
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 they could be experienced politicians.
Therefore
 , they claim that in some cases abilities are more fascinating in some
people
 that are unexpectedly suitable for them. In conclusion, there are many attitudes about selecting
female
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females
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 and
male
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males
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 in different job positions. In my view, all
people
 have
this
 right to apply for several positions and
accepted
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 for them just based on their skills not
gender
.
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