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Tourism today creates a variety of problems, such as pollution due to flights, traffic congestion and water pollution. Do you think that governments should impose extra taxes on flights or accommodation to restrict today's tourism industry?

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One
 of the widely discussed issues nowadays is the impact of
tourism
 on the environment. It is undeniable that travelling and exploring new places become an essential part of our life.
However
, these days transport used by tourists causes outrageous amounts of damage,
such
 as pollution. In order to combat
this
problem
 government should impose additional taxes to limit today's
tourism
 industry.
One
 of the main aspects of the
problem
 is that planes and trains emit huge amounts of carbon dioxide which is the main cause of global warming.
One
 of the main reasons behind
that is
 these types of transportation are popular in
this
 modern era, any eco-friendly alternatives are not invented,
furthermore
, we can not use obsolete conveyance vehicles with zero harm to nature,
due to
 the demands of the contemporary world.
This
 could lead to a boost in the Greenhouse effect and destroy the ozone layer.
Moreover
, the common
problem
 among tourist cities is pollution, often voyagers polluting sights and natural landscapes with plastics, paper or other variations of trash. To tackle
this
problem
 government should add extra taxes to the
tourism
 field and provide special places with surveillance cameras.
This
 may be the easiest way to reduce the tremendous number of globetrotters, but because of the high cost of travelling many people will diminish the travelling number or even stop it. Having weighed everything mentioned , we can come to the conclusion that pollution is a significant
problem
 and
one
 of the greatest drawbacks of having
tourism
 in the country. So, it would not be surprising to see some changes in the price of train or plane tickets and sightseeing in the near future. Actions must be taken urgently ,
otherwise
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 we will have to pass our world to the next generation in a bad shape
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