Tourism today creates a variety of problems, such as pollution due to flights, traffic congestion, and water pollution. Do you think that governments should impose extra taxes on flights or accommodations to restrict today’s tourism industry?

it is common knowledge that
tourism
today creates numerous problems,
such
as
pollution
because of flights, traffic congestion, and water
pollution
. From my point of
view
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there is no need to impose extra
taxes
on flights or accommodation. on the one
hand
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there is no denying fact that extra
taxes
on flights or accommodation will decrease
tourism
.
definitely
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there are many individuals who are not wealthy and they save money for going and exploring new
countries
,
however
, there is no guarantee that it can be helpful,
for
instance
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one of my friends is not rich and at that time he had to go to another country but unfortunately the price for tickets were higher than it used to be and what is more accommodation was not cheap either, but he had no choice,
therefore
,
therefore
he paid for all of it,
consequently
if there is a desire or there is a necessity now matter how much will a person has to pay he will do it eventually
on the other hand
, if governments impose extra
taxes
many humans will lose
their
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interest, or if there is no necessity they will not spend a huge amount of money only on travelling,
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however
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it will not solve problems with
pollution
.
for
example
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pollution
is not done by only
tourism
, many residents pollute our society they throw away their garbage in water or in the streets.
Additionally
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many
countries's
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economies are rich
due to
tourism
, and if one-day people stop going to other
countries
those
countries
sooner or later will have many issues. in conclusion, in my
opinion
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governments should not impose extra
taxes
because it will cause more problems than now there are
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