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newly graduate students in Uk and their proportions

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The two charts illustrate the number of recently graduated pupils and the percentage of people who have just completed their studies at work in different three years in
UK
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.
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 through
a
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college and just
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 work in the UK had
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 difference in 1992, 1997 and 2002. Among them, the recent number of people with a university degree was the highest in 1997, up to 200000, and the percentage of students that attend sales jobs had the least, down to 9%. Till 2002, the trend of folks
about
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barely
came
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 out of the
school yard
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 became similar and wet to an average site. It can
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noticed
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 that the recently graduated students reached the bottom in 1992,
whereas
 the number increased slowly after that, until 1997.
On the contrary
, the proportion of pupils who
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 professional work amounted to a peak, which was 58%,
thereafter
 the percentage reduced quickly.
Similarly
, the proportion of managerial and administration was in the same place in 1997 and 2002, which both were 18%.
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