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The line graph below shows diffrence of food consumption in China between 1985 and 2010.

The line graph below shows diffrence of food consumption in China between 1985 and 2010.
The indicators below
shows
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show
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Correct article usage
the diffrence
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diffrence
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difference
of
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in
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 food consumption in China between 1985 and 2010. Recording to
this
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 graph we can see the preference of Chinese people.Each
lines
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line
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presenting
Wrong verb form
presents
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 each
indications
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indication
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. One of them falling
while
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 one of them rising to high year by year. There are two general
meal
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meals
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 to eat. The fish which
quite
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is quite
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 popular in China based on the lines had high indicators since 1985. In 1995 it had downward from 700 to 600 but
then
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 it rocketed significantly and since 2000 it completed to rise upward.By
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,contras
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contras
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contrast
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 the meat despite the low indicators step by step rose
steadly
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steadily
. The salt from the beginning dropped sharply without even a fluctuation. And fell from 500 in 1985 to 150 in 2010 and completing to fall yet.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
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