You just bought dog food at a pet store and you had problem with the food. Write to the manage of store. In the letter: * explain what happened * Describe how the food affect you pet * Write about the action you want the manager to take

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Dear

sir

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or Madam I am writing to express my

disappoiment

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disappointment

with the product,

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recently from your store. It is dog food,

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bought it yesterday, my bill will be sent with

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letter. I would like to let you know that it expired 1 week ago. When

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realized

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, my dog had a stomachache from tô much, it was

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taken to the veterinary clinic and problems

solved

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. I have found it to be unreliable and frustrating to use.

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tried to contact your support team to resolve

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issue but

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have not received

satisfactory

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response. I would

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tolike

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request a refund for

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myself

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, as

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feel that it is not worth the money

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paid for it and affected my dog's health. You should check the product again to avoid encountering the same thing.

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faithfully Mr Thong

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

143 words

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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People who damage public property, such as buildings or statues should be required to do community service (such as cleaning parks) as a punishment rather than other forms of punishment (such as paying a fine or going to prison). To what extent do you agree to disagree?

You just bought dog food at a pet store and you had problem with the food. Write to the manage of store. In the letter: * explain what happened * Describe how the food affect you pet * Write about the action you want the manager to take