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The graph shows the amount earned by graduates of different age groups in 2002. It includes those with a degree, those with a higher degree (postgraduate) and those with other qualifications. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the amount earned by graduates of different age groups in 2002. It includes those with a degree, those with a higher degree (postgraduate) and those with other qualifications. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph displays the salaries of full-time graduate employees across different
age
 groups, ranging from 21-25 years old to 56-60 years old. The vertical axis shows weekly
earnings
 in pounds, ranging from £300 to £900.
Overall
, the data indicates that the weekly
earnings
 of employees increase steadily from the youngest
age
group
 up to middle
age
, before fluctuating and tapering off slightly.
Earnings
 rise consistently until the 36-40
age
group
 for those with a first degree and other qualifications, reaching peaks of around £700 and slightly above £800, respectively.
After
this
 peak, the weekly salaries of those in the 'Others' category fall below £700,
while
 the
earnings
 of individuals with a first degree remain relatively stable until the oldest
age
group
.
Although
Correct word choice
However
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 the employees with Higher
degree
Fix the agreement mistake
degrees
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 reach a peak
approximately
Change preposition
of approximately
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 800
pound
Change to a plural noun
pounds
show examples
 in the 56-60
age
group
. Their salaries rose steadily up to
41
Correct article usage
the 41
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-45
age
group
, after which declined consistently until the 51-55
age
group
.
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