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The graph shows the amount earned by graduates of different age groups in 2002. It includes those with a degree, those with a higher degree (postgraduate) and those with other qualifications. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph shows the amount earned by graduates of different age groups in 2002. It includes those with a degree, those with a higher degree (postgraduate) and those with other qualifications. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph demonstrates the weekly
earnings
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 of full-time graduate
employees
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according to
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 their
age
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 and type of
qualification
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 in 2002. The first-degree
group
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 had the lowest
earnings
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overall
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. The
age
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group
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 with the lowest
earnings
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 was 21–25-year-olds, at almost $360 per
week
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.
Employees
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 aged 36–40 and 41–45 with a first degree earned nearly $700 per
week
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, which was the highest figure for
this
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qualification
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.
Employees
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 with other qualifications were the highest-paid
group
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overall
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. As with the first-degree
group
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, the lowest-paid
age
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group
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 was 21–25-year-olds, with weekly
earnings
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 of approximately $420.
This
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group
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 reached approximately $820 per
week
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 among those aged 36–40, making
this
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 the highest-earning
age
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group
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 for
this
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qualification
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. The higher-degree
group
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 was the
second-highestpaid
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second-highest-paid
, with
employees
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 aged 56–60 earning almost $780 per
week
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, making
this
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 the highest-earning
age
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group
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 for
this
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qualification
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.
Overall
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, weekly
earnings
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 generally increased with
age
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, with
employees
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 aged 21–25 being the lowest-paid
group
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 across all qualifications. Each
qualification
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also
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 reached its highest
earnings
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 among an older
age
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group
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words earnings, employees, age, qualification, group, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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