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The graph shows the amount earned by graduates of different age groups in 2002. It includes those with a degree, those with a higher degree (postgraduate) and those with other qualifications. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph shows the amount earned by graduates of different age groups in 2002. It includes those with a degree, those with a higher degree (postgraduate) and those with other qualifications. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the weekly income of full-time employees in 2002 across eight
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groups
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,
categorized
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 by three levels of qualifications
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 higher
degree
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, first
degree
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, and others.
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, individuals with other qualifications earned the highest weekly salaries throughout their early and mid-careers,
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 those with a first
degree
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 consistently earned the least.
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, earnings for all three
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 steadily increased in the first two decades before fluctuating or plateauing in the later
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groups
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. declined steadily to roughly £690 by
ages
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 Starting at around £420 per week for the 21-25
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 group, the income of employees with other qualifications rose dramatically, peaking
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 £820 between
ages
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 36 and 40.
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, their pay declined steadily to roughly £690 by
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ages
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56
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–60.
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, those with a higher
degree
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 saw their earnings grow steadily from £380 to a peak of about £750 between
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41
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 and 45. After a brief decline,
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 group experienced a strong rebound after
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 55, ending with the highest pay of all
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, at about £790. First-
degree
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 holders followed a similar initial trajectory, rising to £690 before plateauing for the remainder of their careers.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, groups, degree, ages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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