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In the future people may no longer be able to pay for tanks in shop using cash all payments may have to be made by cards or using phones Do you think this will happen one day do you think this will happen?Why do you think some people might not be happy to give up using cash?

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In the modern era dash payment for valuable things will be replaced by credit card or online transaction methods in my opinion I believe
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 some folks might not be happy and show reluctance
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 shifting from the old method to the new one finance matters are quite sensitive to handle
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 card payments will help us in purchasing quite effectively easy and time-saving. For ,instance during COVID-19 pandemic physical contact was strictly prohibited but the Exchange of goods and money continues through electronic devices
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 advancement in technology is not understood by everyone when we talk about our elders they don't feel confident underlying electronic devices for purchasing
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 a lack of acknowledgement about modern devices they had a fear of losing money as they heard of many scams
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 a recent study shows the elder people prefers to pay cash as they are unfamiliar to handle electronic methods like 0TP and Passcodes in ,conclusion technology will win over financial matters. Even though the risk and lack of awareness keep folks away from electronic money exchange
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 I believe that in the modern
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 people will change their minds towards New modes of transaction
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