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Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths and weaknesses. Is it right to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender?

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There have been many
gender
 discriminations in terms of occupation throughout
the
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history .Nowadays, it has lost its activity;
however
, the discriminations derived from differences still exist in
modern
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 world. Some would argue that there is no need to cease
the
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gender
 exclusion, but I strongly believe that excluding individuals from professions based on
gender
 biases
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 and logically unjustifiable. In today’s world, some concepts
such
 as equality and justice are emphasized by some of the communities;
thus
,those consider that
women
 can cope
any
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 challenges they come across like
men
 do.
Conversely
, other fellowships contemplate
men
 and
women
 are separate by nature;namely, some
of
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jobs are better for
men
 rather than
women
such
 as coal mining,
building
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 owing to the fact that these occupations require so much physical effort.
However
, stereotyping like that contradicts
opportunity
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of
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 equality and justice.
Equally
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 important point is that maximizing talent and potential is so crucial for personal and professional growth in both companies and nations. If it is provided both
men
 and
women
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a
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great freedom of choosing their own path, those who follow their dreams consistent with qualities and aspirations, there is no doubt that
this
 will offer
a
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great success for both
individual
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individuals
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 and
professional
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professionals
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 as it happened in the history.
Overall
, excluding individuals from professions based on their
gender
 is not logical.
This
 point is exceedingly vital for maintaining and creating a better society which can
proggress
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progress
.
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