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The line chart shows trends in terms of employment in the USA in millions and predictions for thte future.

The line chart shows trends in terms of employment in the USA in millions and predictions for thte future.
#line #trends #terms #employment #usa #millions #predictions #thte #future
The given line chart displays
about
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trends
of
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 employment in the USA in millions and
prediction
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predictions
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 for the future. The information is about three employment services. The data
in
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is
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 given in millions.
Firstly
, in Manufacturing, in 1975, it was 10 and
also
 in 1977, which increase in 1979 by 15 and in 1980 it was highest with 40 and it decrease by 10 in 2025.
Secondly
, in the service, in 1975 it was the lowest 10 which
keep
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 on increasing and in 2025 it
were
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 90.
Thirdly
, in
the
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agriculture, from 80 in 1975 and 1977, in 1979 it
were
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 around 40, in 1980 it was 40, in 1982 it was 15 and
2025
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in 2025
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 with the lowest
by
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at
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 10. In conclusion, in the above information manufacturing was increasing and
derceasing
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decreasing
. The above data
contrain
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contains
 information about
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the year
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year
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years
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 from 1975 to 2025. The above data is about trends for 3 jobs.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "trends" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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