The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.

Writing Task 1
The chart illustrates the spending for three different tasks
such
as food and drinks,
resturant
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restaurants
and
hotel
and entertainment in Britain
according to
five
age
groups in 2004. It is obvious that people have spent in different ways for those tasks and it
differ
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differs
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with their
age
.
At
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In
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the beginning, most of them
have
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apply
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allocated their income for food and drinks
exept
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except
under
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those under
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30 whose great sums are for
resturant
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restaurants
and
hotel
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hotels
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when
age
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aged
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76 and
above spent
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above-spent
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money
for
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on
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food and drinks
arround
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around
22.05%
from
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of
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their total income. Indeed there is
a
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an
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increasing pattern
for
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of
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consuming
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consumption
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.
On the other hand
,
the
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a
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huge proportion of
money
had for entertainment. Particularly,
age
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the age
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61-75 group had more
entetainment
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entertainment
than the others which was the same amount of 76+ group for consuming.
However
, the least amount had been spent
people
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by people
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under 30 for
entetainment
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entertainment
and it was slightly more
yhan
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than
5% during the 76+ group
also
spend nearly two times more than them.
Furthermore
,
under
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those under
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30 had allocated more
money
for
resturant
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restaurant
restaurants
and
hotel
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hotels
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while
31-45 and 46-60 spent same almost 12.5%.
However
, 61-75 have
baan
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been
spent
least
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the least
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money
for
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on
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resturant
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restaurants
and
hotel
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hotels
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which is nearly 2.
According to
the data, people have spent more
money
for
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on
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eating and drinking with entertainment.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, however".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words resturant, hotel, age, money with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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