The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1
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The chart illustrates the spending for three different tasks
such
as food and drinks, Linking Words
Use synonyms
resturant
and Correct your spelling
restaurants
hotel
and entertainment in Britain Use synonyms
according to
five Linking Words
age
groups in 2004. It is obvious that people have spent in different ways for those tasks and it Use synonyms
differ
with their Change the verb form
differs
age
.
Use synonyms
At
the beginning, most of them Change the preposition
In
have
allocated their income for food and drinks Unnecessary verb
apply
exept
Correct your spelling
except
under
30 whose great sums are for Correct pronoun usage
those under
Use synonyms
resturant
and Correct your spelling
restaurants
Use synonyms
hotel
when Fix the agreement mistake
hotels
Use synonyms
age
76 and Wrong verb form
aged
above spent
Add a hyphen
above-spent
money
Use synonyms
for
food and drinks Change preposition
on
arround
22.05% Correct your spelling
around
from
their total income. Indeed there is Change preposition
of
a
increasing pattern Change the article
an
for
Change preposition
of
consuming
.
Replace the word
consumption
On the other hand
, Linking Words
the
huge proportion of Correct article usage
a
money
had for entertainment. Particularly, Use synonyms
Use synonyms
age
61-75 group had more Correct article usage
the age
entetainment
than the others which was the same amount of 76+ group for consuming. Correct your spelling
entertainment
However
, the least amount had been spent Linking Words
people
under 30 for Change preposition
by people
entetainment
and it was slightly more Correct your spelling
entertainment
yhan
5% during the 76+ group Correct your spelling
than
also
spend nearly two times more than them.
Linking Words
Furthermore
, Linking Words
under
30 had allocated more Correct pronoun usage
those under
money
for Use synonyms
Use synonyms
resturant
and Correct your spelling
restaurant
restaurants
Use synonyms
hotel
Fix the agreement mistake
hotels
while
31-45 and 46-60 spent same almost 12.5%. Linking Words
However
, 61-75 have Linking Words
baan
spent Correct your spelling
been
least
Correct article usage
the least
money
Use synonyms
for
Change preposition
on
Use synonyms
resturant
and Correct your spelling
restaurants
Use synonyms
hotel
which is nearly 2.
Fix the agreement mistake
hotels
According to
the data, people have spent more Linking Words
money
Use synonyms
for
eating and drinking with entertainment.Change preposition
on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, however".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words resturant, hotel, age, money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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