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Nowadays employment options are changing and employees cannot rely on having the same job and working conditions throughout their life. What are some possible causes? Suggest some ways to plan for the future under these circumstances.

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advancement
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 in technology, the thinking of
people
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also
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 changing. The
people
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 do not want to do
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orthodox
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jobs
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, that
people
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 used to do in the past. And they do not wish to stay in
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 environment for
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 whole life. In
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 essay, I shall discuss what are the causes for
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 and a way to secure the future as well. In the past,
people
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 wished to have a
job
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 that can provide bread and butter for their family and a little saving after retirement. And they
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 to
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job
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 for
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 entire life. They did not think about the growth from that particular
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 they can attain, as long as
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 they can pay
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the bills.
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, nowadays,
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 generation
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job
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 in which they have
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, rather than securing a
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 that can pay them a handsome salary. And there are umpteen options available for
chosing
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choosing
 a
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. You can earn money simply sitting at home,
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 of going to the office daily.
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, they can not stick to
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 work, unless they can see growth out of it. There are many reasons behind it.
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, thanks to the
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,
one
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 can do a
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 from home.
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, in recent years, there are many skilled
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job
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jobs
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 available and
people
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 are
ganing
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gaining
 skills for the work they are interested in, rather than doing some desk
jobs
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. And they do not force themselves to
one
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job
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 for years. Because
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 there are numerous alternatives out there. But, it is imperative to look for the future
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 the present. So, saving money would become essential for these types of
jobs
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. Because of changing multiple
jobs
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,
one
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 can not have savings after retirement.
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 to
past
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the past
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, an orthodox
job
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provide
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pension
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 for the employees. To recapitulate, it is
upto
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up to
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that
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, what type of
job
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 or for what duration
one
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 wanted to do the same work. But, it is significantly important to secure the future for him/her and
family
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his family
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