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The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening.) Describe the information presented below, comparing results for men and women in the categories shown. Suggest reasons for what you see.

The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening.) Describe the information presented below, comparing results for men and women in the categories shown. Suggest reasons for what you see.
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The diagram illustrates comparing
men
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 and
women
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 per week in different categories that include unpaid
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. Unpaid
work
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 means to refer to
such
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 activities as childcare in the home , housework and grading.
Overall
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, it is clear from the diagram that the average of
women
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 is a higher rate in all categories than
men
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. Looking for more detail, the rate of
men
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 without
children
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 is
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 with one or two
children
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 by around 21.
However
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, it slightly decreases with three or more
children
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.
On the other hand
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 , the average of
women
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 rapidly rises from 30 to 60
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 the number of
children
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. Thu, I believe that there are some reasons . One of the main
women
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 who are taking care of a home and
children
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 and the
men
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 are always busy with
work
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. He
also
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 most of the time outside of the home.
Furthermore
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, there is no doubt that
women
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 take more responsibility for unpaid
work
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 than
men
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, work, children with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • unpaid work
  • categories
  • average hours
  • men
  • women
  • comparison
  • overview
  • highest
  • differences
  • reasons
  • childcare
  • housework
  • gardening
  • gender roles
  • societal expectations
  • cultural norms
  • work-life balance
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