The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of regular work out of Australian people in different genres, male and female, and six different ages from 15 years old to more than 65 In 2010.
Overall
Linking Words
, we can see that in the youngest
Use synonyms
group
Add a comma
,group
show examples
men
Use synonyms
did work out more than
women
Use synonyms
,
while
Linking Words
in other categories
women
Use synonyms
had the highest proportion except in the oldest
group
Use synonyms
both had the same percentage. In 2010, in the youngest
group
Use synonyms
,
men
Use synonyms
did more regular physical activity than
women
Use synonyms
, their percentages were about 53% and 47% respectively.
However
Linking Words
, in two groups of 25 to 34 and 35 to 44
women
Use synonyms
had the highest ratio. In 35 to
44
Add a comma
,44
show examples
there was more than a 10% difference between the two genres that was the highest among other groups,
men
Use synonyms
40% and
women
Use synonyms
53%.
Moreover
Linking Words
, in the other two groups 45 to 54 and 55 to 64, more than 50% of
women
Use synonyms
did regular exercise, in comparison with
men
Use synonyms
they had 43% to 45%. In the
last
Linking Words
group
Use synonyms
which was people who were 65 and over both genres had the same percentage about 47%.
Submitted by shahab_e2020 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words group, men, women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Australian men
  • Australian women
  • Age groups
  • Regular physical activity
  • Participated
  • Increased
  • Decreased
  • Proportion
  • Physically active
  • Gender difference
  • Engaged
  • Exercise
What to do next:
Look at other essays: