The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts show the proportions of water usage on three items(industrial,agricultural and domestic) in 6 different countries around the world.
Overall
,the highest proportion among
four
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countries belongs to agricultural
use
whereas
, Europe and South America spent much amount of water on domestic sections. Industrial usage in North America and Europe was about 48% and 53% respectively and had almost half of the total amount.
In contrast
, less than 10% of water consumption in Africa,Central Asia and South Asia was allocated to
this
section .(7% , 5% and 12%) Moving to agricultural
use
,a remarkable ratio was dedicated to
this
field
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84% for African people,88% for Central
Asian
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Asians
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and 81%
regarding
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South East
Asian
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Asians
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.
Besides
,North
American
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America
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and European spent less than 40% of
this
section.( 39% the former and 32% the latter)
On the other hand
,domestic
use
has the same proportion of about 7% in South East and Central Asia , just 2% more in Africa.
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feagures
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figures
were 15% and 13% respectively for
Eropean
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European
and North
American
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America
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. All in all ,the highest percentage
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refers
to South
American
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America
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of
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about 19% in terms of domestic
use
.
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