The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females aged 18-20 in a city who participated in a various activities in nine month in 2015
The bar chart makes a comparison between the
percentage
of males
and females
aged 18-20 in a city who participated in 5 activities (basketball, cycling, football, swimming, hockey) in nine months in 2015.
Overall
, the percentage
of males
participated
in various activities Correct pronoun usage
who participated
higher
than Add a missing verb
was higher
the
Correct determiner usage
that
females
. The Change preposition
of females
males
participated the most on
football Change preposition
in
while
the females
participated in cycling. In contrast
, both the males
and females
participated the least on
hockey.
A deep analysis of the bar chart provided reveals the Change preposition
in
percentage
of males
participated
Wrong verb form
participating
on
football is highest with around 52%. Change preposition
in
Next,
the percentage
of males
participated
Correct pronoun usage
who participated
on
basketball Change preposition
in
higher
than the Add a missing verb
was higher
percentage
of males
with around 33%. Meanwhile, on
hockey, the Change preposition
in
percentage
of males
higher
than the Add a missing verb
is higher
percentage
of females
with
around 12%.
It is noticeable that the Change preposition
at
percentage
of females
participated
Correct pronoun usage
who participated
on
cycling Change preposition
in
slightly
more than the Add a missing verb
was slightly
percentage
of males
with
around 40%. Change preposition
at
In addition
, the percentage
of females
participated
Wrong verb form
participating
on
swimming is higher than the Change preposition
in
percentage
of males
with around 35%.Submitted by yeshomeclass on
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