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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentages of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentages of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
graph
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 illustrates a fluctuation in
books
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 borrowed in the libraries in four different villages from
June
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 to
September
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 2014.
Overall
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, there is a dramatic rise in the number of
books
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 that Sutton Wood lent. The increase is more gradual in both Church Mount and West Eaton
whereas
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 Ryselip is the only library which had a sharp decline in the total number of borrowed
books
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.
According to
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 the
graph
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, the most significant fluctuation occurred in the figure of Sutton Wood with an incredible gap between the highest and the lowest. After a slight increase from 250 in
June
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 to 280 in July, the figure experienced a sudden drop in August when only 100
books
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 were borrowed. The number of
books
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 borrowed in Sutton Wood skyrocketed to reach the top at 300 in
September
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. Regardless of the most
books
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 borrowed in Ryeslip in
June
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, there was a constant decrease to hit the bottom at 160 in
September
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. Both the graphs for West Eaton and Church Mount show an upward trend
although
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 people borrowed relatively fewer
books
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 than the other two. Starting at the same level at 50 in
June
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, the gap between West Eaton and Church Mount became wider in August when 150
books
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 were borrowed in the former
while
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 130
books
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 in the latter. They followed a different path as the former
graph
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 remained stable
in contrast
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 to the latter
graph
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 which kept rising and reached 100 in
September
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, books, june, september with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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