Some people think that schools should prioritize teaching students’ practical skills for the workplace, while others believe that schools should focus on academic subjects such as science and math. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

people think that schools should prioritize teaching students practical skills,
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are the skills that help the student in their real-life
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these could contain knife skills, wood carving and plant and animal knowledge these could vary depending on the country -wood carving wouldn't help you in the desert- others think that schools should prioritise
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academic subjects like science and math, these are the subjects that would help the students study should they pursue academic jobs and or study
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the academic side and the practical side of school could have a middle ground, science could be replicated in real life, wood carving could use some math to messer.
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