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The chars below show the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthif eaten too much. Summarize the informtaion by sleceting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant .

The presented graph illustrates the consumption of
sodium
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, saturated fat, and added
sugars
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 in an average meal across the United States. Upon analysing the data, it becomes evident that the majority of
sodium
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 and saturated fat were consumed during
dinner
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,
whereas
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 added
sugars
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 were predominantly consumed during
snacks
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. The
lunch
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 meal
also
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 showed a high
percentage
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 of
sodium
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 and saturated fat,
while
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breakfast
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 had the lowest percentages for all three nutrients. In terms of
sodium
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 and saturated fat,
dinner
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 and
lunch
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 exhibited comparable proportions, with
dinner
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 having a higher
percentage
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 of both nutrients (43% for
sodium
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 and 37% for saturated fat) than
lunch
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 (29% for
sodium
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 and 26% for saturated fat).
Conversely
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, the average meal for
dinner
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 and
lunch
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 contained a significantly lower amount of added sugar, with 23% and 19%, respectively. Moving on to
breakfast
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 and
snacks
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, both meals contained the same amounts of
sodium
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 (14%).
However
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,
snacks
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 had a higher
percentage
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 of saturated fat (21%),
while
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breakfast
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 had a slightly lower
percentage
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 (16%). Regarding added
sugars
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, the contrast was most significant, with 42% of
snacks
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 being sugary, and
breakfast
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 containing only 16% of added
sugars
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.

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