The chart shows the percentage change in the share of international students among university graduates in different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006.

The chart shows the percentage change in the share of international students among university graduates in different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006.
The chart shows the percentage change in the share of international students among university graduates in different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006.
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New Brunswick got the highest scores with about 8% in 2001 and approximately 13% in 2006 got ahead of other
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Ontario appealed the lowest rates in reportings with about 3% in 2001 and nearly 6% in 2006.
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both years. There is British Columbia
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had noticeably high ranks above
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except New Brunswick,
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the paces of 2001
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not impress.
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we have Alberta with slightly identical ranges with British Columbia in 2001.
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considerably towering grades as well there
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records.
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  • percentage change
  • share of international students
  • university graduates
  • Canadian provinces
  • increase
  • decrease
  • overall trend
  • notable similarities
  • economic conditions
  • immigration policies
  • numerical values
  • reputation of universities
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