The chart shows the percentage change in the share of international students among university graduates in different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006.

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New Brunswick got the highest scores with about 8% in 2001 and approximately 13% in 2006 got ahead of other

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Ontario appealed the lowest rates in reportings with about 3% in 2001 and nearly 6% in 2006.

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we have Alberta with slightly identical ranges with British Columbia in 2001.

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