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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
This
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 bar graph illustrates the
value
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 of exports of different items in a country in 2015 and 2016.
It is clear that
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 the
export
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 rate of petroleum and engineered
products
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 are notably high than the other
products
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. The third most popular
export
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 category was gems and jewellery in both years,
while
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 agricultural items earned around 30 billion dollars in these two years.
According to
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this
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figure
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,figure
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 textile shows the lowest
value
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in
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apply
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every time at 28
billions
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billion
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 in 2015 and 32
billions
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billion
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 in 2016.
Although
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 in 2016 the
export
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 proportion of petroleum and engineered foods
were
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was
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same
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the same
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 at 62 billion dollars which is 30 dollars higher than
agricultural
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the agricultural
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export
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value
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. In 2016 petroleum and engineered category showed the highest rate,
wherease
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whereas
 other
products
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 were higher in 2015.
Moreover
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, agricultural
item
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items
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 had the same
export
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value
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 percentage when other
products
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 had differences between the rate.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words value, export, products with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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