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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three type of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparison where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three type of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparison where relevant.
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The proportion of three different nutritions including
sodium
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, saturated fat, and
sugar
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 added in food are found in general meals and is illustrated in the form of pie charts. It is considered that some kinds of them would not be good for health if people had consumed them often.
Overall
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,
sugar
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 holds the highest
percentage
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 in snacks,
while
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dinner
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 and
lunch
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 contain the largest
percentage
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 of both
sodium
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 and saturated fat.
Whereas
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,
breakfast
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 contains the least amount for all three.
According to
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 the pie charts, the highest proportion of
additional
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added
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 sugars is found in snacks at 43%,
while
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breakfast
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 has the smallest
percentage
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 of added
sugar
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 at 16%.
In addition
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 to that,
dinner
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 and
lunch
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 have the second and third largest percentages of
sugar
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 at 23% and 19%, respectively. Other substances
such
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 as
sodium
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 and saturated fat show a similar
percentage
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 in both
dinner
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 and
lunch
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. Looking
further
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 into the details,
sodium
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 is found in equal amounts at
breakfast
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 and
lunch
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 at levels of 14%.
Next,
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the second chart shows that
dinner
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 accounts for the largest amount of saturated fat at 37%, followed by
lunch
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 (26%) and snacks (21%). With the least amount of saturated fat (16%), added
sugar
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 (16%) and
sodium
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 (14%) is
breakfast
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, sugar, percentage, dinner, lunch, breakfast with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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