The graphs below show the percentage of math graduates and all graduates who got full time job after graduating from a university in Australia and also show the average salary of both these types of grads, from 2004 to 2012.
The line chart and table give information for the proportion of
full time
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full-time
employment
and average
yearly Add an article
an average
salary
of Math
and all graduates
from an Australian university in an eight-year period, between 2004 and 2012.
it is clear that
the Maths graduates
surpassed all graduates
for both
full-time employment
and average salary
. Additionally
, the percentage of full-time employment
remained unchanged over the year period, whereas
the salaries go up with time.
In 2004, the proportion of Math
graduates
getting full-time jobs was 80%, while
only 65% of all graduates
guaranteed
full-time Add a missing verb
were guaranteed
employment
. The percentage of both
Maths and all graduates
slightly increased approximately
10% over two years. Change preposition
by approximately
However
, after the year 2008, the proportion dropped for both
and made up the same values in 2012 compared to the year 2004.
Looking at the statistic for the average salary
in two years, 2004 and 2006, Math
and all graduates
was the same salary
with $41,000 and $43,000. The salaries of both
math
and all graduates
rose continuously with time but math
graduates
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graduates'
graduate's
salary
went up higher and more rapidly than all Fix the agreement mistake
salaries
graduates
in the next six years. In 2012, Math
graduates
got pay of $56,000 while
others got only $51,000.Submitted by anhnguhongmai on
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