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The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates predicted changes in the
population
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 of
India
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 and
China
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 between the
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year
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years
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 2000 to 2050.
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, over the 50-
year
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 period,
India
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 is going to experience steady growth in its
population
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 and it will overtake
China
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.
On the other hand
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,
China
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’s
population
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 will peak in 2030 and
then
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 begin to fall. In the
year
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 2000,
India
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’s total
population
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 was the lowest at 1.0
billion
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,
compare
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 to
China
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 which was two times higher at 1.2
billion
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.
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, in the
year
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2023
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 both surged at
same
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the same
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 level of
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population
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the population
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 with almost 1.42
billion
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population
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 respectively.
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, both are expected to soar rapidly to the expected
year
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 2030 at 1.45
billion
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 respectively. In the
year
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 2030, both countries
China
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 and
India
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 intersected respectively.
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, from the
year
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 2030 to 2050
China
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’s
population
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 is likely to sink at 1.4
billion
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.
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,
India
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 probably overtook
China
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due to
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assumed
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 increment of numbers with the prediction of
1.6
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a 1.6
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billion
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population
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 in the
year
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 2050.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, india, china, year, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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